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a story of my early days

I very rarely post anything that isn’t in some way a fiction, I normally enjoy writing stories that (hopefully) leave the reader with something to think about, maybe even alter the way they look at the world. For a change I am posting something that is autobiographical, but retains the same aims.

Today I was faced (as I have been every year for some years now) with six teenage boys, hair cropped short, regulation white shirt and black trousers, ready to embark on their two years service as missionaries. As I looked at the boys nervously clutching their box of pamphlets, I was reminded of me at their age. I remember that feeling of excitement mixed with the feeling of nausea at the pit of my stomach. Recalling that particularly uneasy feeling, I decided to tell the boys a story of my early days in the mission in an attempt to lift their spirits. I told them of the event that, not only helped me understand the great things one can achieve as a missionary, but also shaped the rest of my life.

Seeing the look on their faces after I told my story, I thought perhaps I should write it down to share with others, so I’m posting it here on my blog. I hope you enjoy it and maybe you might like to send a link to anyone in the community that you think might benefit from it.

At the time I was at college, living in a shared dorm. In the room next door to me was a student from Bavaria (I forget his name now, which is terrible I know). Things weren’t going so well for him, he was flunking class and homesick, he would go days without leaving his room. I remember he would always play Smiths songs over and over; the sound of ‘Hatful of Hollow’ would drift through the thin walls well into the night.

After my neighbor hadn’t turned up to class for a couple of weeks, I thought I would drop by. I was eager to do a good deed by lending an understanding ear and perhaps even share some of the teachings with him to help ease his troubles.

After knocking for quite some time he eventually came to the door. Although I don’t remember his name, I will never forget the way he looked, hair tousled, dirty clothes thrown around his skinny frame and heavy bags under his eyes. His room was bare save for a mattress, a pile of dirty clothes and take out cartons.

I had been studying the ‘Miracle of the Seven Sisters’ at the time. Considering the stutter I had as a teenager the ‘ssstory of the ssseven ssssissters’ wasn’t the most dynamic one I could have told, but I managed to get through it fast enough not to stumble over my words too much.

He listened politely, but didn’t seem very interested. However, when I reached the part of the story about the fifth sister, how she at her time of greatest personal success, had sacrificed so much for her sisters, his ears seemed to perk up.

When I parted with him that evening, the record stylus was slowly cutting a groove into the label in the centre of the Smith’s album, so I knew I had made an impression of sorts.

When I was told that he wouldn’t be returning to class I became very worried that my teachings had fallen on deaf ears, or worse still I had led him down the wrong path altogether. I feared for him and even added him to my nightly prayers.

I found out that the very day after I had talked to him, he had returned home to Bavaria. It turned out that he had several sisters himself, and his mother, alone after his father’s death, had been taken ill. Although I will never know for sure, I felt my teachings had helped him to make the decision to return home to care for his family.

It was this event that led to me moving into the community full time and some years later, taking the role of supervisor for the young missionaries. Not only had the miracle of the seven sisters had an effect on my neighbor, but also myself and (I hope) the many young missionaries that have been in my care since my graduation.

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  1. October 8, 2010 at 8:48 pm | #1

    The power of words is always impressive and can have incredible results — but even the simple act of reaching out to another person in their time of need can help, stutter or no stutter.

    • adamjkeeper
      October 8, 2010 at 9:20 pm | #2

      Thanks that’s a really nice comment. Your right about the power of words i fear I may have overdone it a tad.

  2. Deanna Schrayer
    October 9, 2010 at 12:39 am | #3

    What a wonderful story Adam. I’m glad that you not only have this cherished memory, but that you chose to share it with us. Thank you.

    • adamjkeeper
      October 9, 2010 at 9:41 am | #4

      Thanks deanne, that was a really sweet comment. Just to make sure you know this is entirely made up.

  3. October 9, 2010 at 2:15 am | #5

    I like the frame story that you are using here. I’m not sure I’m getting the reference for the miracle of the seven sisters (other than the greek myth).

    • adamjkeeper
      October 9, 2010 at 9:37 am | #6

      Thanks Aidan glad you got the frame thing, I may have scared some people away with that. There was no real reference to the seven sisters thing, it’s a train stop on my way home.

  4. October 9, 2010 at 3:54 pm | #7

    Adam, thank you for sharing this, it seems that the events of that day did truly send two people in the direction that their hearts were intended to take.

    • adamjkeeper
      October 9, 2010 at 7:15 pm | #8

      Thanks stephen, but I think I must have taken my first person fiction thing a little too far this week!

  5. October 9, 2010 at 8:56 pm | #9

    This was a good story. I believed your frame story, too, and it wasn’t until the comments that I figured out it was a total work of fiction. I think this proves you gave this one a real air of authenticity. I enjoyed reading it.

    • adamjkeeper
      October 9, 2010 at 9:14 pm | #10

      Cheers Eric, it’s been an interesting expirement.

  6. October 9, 2010 at 9:14 pm | #11

    I have just re-read this, and the comments and replies, Adam this is just so good, if I had even used my brain for one second (not my strong point) I would have thought “hang on a mo, this is #Fridayflash- the home of flash fiction, and we were all sucked in.

    A true mark of fiction is indeed making the reader believe that it is true.

    The Blair Witch Project was a massive success due to this.

    Absolutely brilliant. Well done.

    • adamjkeeper
      October 9, 2010 at 9:40 pm | #12

      Thanks Steve, much appreciated

  7. October 9, 2010 at 11:41 pm | #13

    Sweet, simple reflecting story. I wondered where you would take us after the missionaries. Thank you for sharing, Adam.

    • adamjkeeper
      October 10, 2010 at 1:16 am | #14

      You know It’s all fiction right?

  8. October 10, 2010 at 2:57 pm | #15

    Great story. Like so many others, you had me totally fooled. This could surely pass as “fact” ;-)

    ~2

  9. October 12, 2010 at 11:41 am | #16

    you certainly had me wondering there – had I not read other stuff of yours that makes it clear you’re not a cult loon, I might not have carried on reading!

    • adamjkeeper
      October 12, 2010 at 2:30 pm | #17

      Nope just a common or garden loon. I hope you got something out of it, bit of an experiment-don’t know what I was trying to achieve, but was interesting.

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